This would make a good poem (try not to chuckle as you remember my dislike of that format). A good, gut-wrenching poem. Did you get the house? Was it long ago?
I could definitely feel your pain and anxiety as you waited to hear. I would love to have heard the result at the end. I was wondering if it would add to the piece to include more about the process in getting to this point and how that has potentially added more to the importance of this moment. Thanks for sharing.
Wow! Waiting is so hard! I would suggest describing this perfect house you are waiting for and maybe memories you would like to build in that house while you intersperse the waiting pieces. Did you get the house?
I agree with Debbie that this could make a good poem!! :) There are so many feeling that you wanted to describe. The honesty of your feelings and thoughts were refreashing, and it made the story much more relateable and real.
This would make a good poem (try not to chuckle as you remember my dislike of that format). A good, gut-wrenching poem. Did you get the house? Was it long ago?
ReplyDeleteI could definitely feel your pain and anxiety as you waited to hear. I would love to have heard the result at the end. I was wondering if it would add to the piece to include more about the process in getting to this point and how that has potentially added more to the importance of this moment. Thanks for sharing.
ReplyDeleteWow! Waiting is so hard! I would suggest describing this perfect house you are waiting for and maybe memories you would like to build in that house while you intersperse the waiting pieces. Did you get the house?
ReplyDeleteI agree with Debbie that this could make a good poem!! :) There are so many feeling that you wanted to describe. The honesty of your feelings and thoughts were refreashing, and it made the story much more relateable and real.
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